In my story of Jackson I kept a few things and I
scrapped a few things. I changed the car that he drives and I also changed the
ending. It felt really strange to go back and reread my story and still find
something that could be changed and made better. I also added some more
dialogue between Jackson and Vanessa and I described Kelly and Jonathon. I kept
the way he describes himself in the mirror because I couldn't think of a better
way to describe him yet. I also described what his room looked like I described
how he has posters of Shay Mitchell, Megan Fox, and Aaliyah. He also has a
poster of Maroon 5 who is one of his favorite bands. I described what the house looked like
stating that it looked like a villa with a pool in the backyard, five bedrooms,
a movie theater in the basement, and also a studio where you could draw paint,
or make music. I tried to use more
sensory detail like smell, touch and, taste. I’ll try to develop that more in
chapter two. I want to give you a little hint of what is going on with Jackson
because I think that’s fair. Jackson will start having nightmares about the
fire and each time he goes to sleep at night he will get more clues on how he
survived the fire and how his parents actually died. I hope that I was able to make my story
better than it was and I hope that you all like it.
A long time ago I had a teacher once tell me that no matter how well you write a story, you can always, always write revisions to it and never ever be done. I imagine that the true trick is figuring out when you need to let go of trying to make it better, and accept your work like a loving child, no matter how "special" that child feels sometimes.
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